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               A Monster Night To Get Revenge              

Chapter 1: The First Day Of Halloween                                               

As the moon came up Jack and Jill were  just getting ready to go to the halloween festival. On the way to the halloween festival Jill picked up some berries up incase she wanted a snack. Jack didn’t need anything so he just went along looking farley excited to go to the festival. When they arrived Jill went to get some water from the water machine and Jack went to get some coca cola from the coke machine, but little did they know they were being watched by someone and never looked in the bushes. Jill first wanted to go to the festival place where people do tricks and cool stuff, Jack agreed since Jill said there would be cool stuff and tricks.

Chapter 2: The Trick Shot Festival

Jill thought that the trick festival was going to be a normal trick festival so she was thinking to change her mind. When Jill and jack went in the trick festival Jack was amazed when he saw everything. Jack’s mind was blown. There was so many things, like elephants, lions, fire hoops, and many other things. Jack thought that Jill was right for the first time of her life. Jill wished that she was performing but when she saw a person perform she changed her mind. After four hours of Jack and Jill watching people performing the performances was finally finished. When jack walked out his eyes was stiff like his mind was blown up by a nuke, Jill wanted to leave the halloween festival but jack didn't want to.

Chapter 3: The Fight To The Death

When no one was at the festival and just Jack and Jill were at the festival Jill said to jack “can we go home now?” Jack said “yeah let's go home i think i've changed my mind of staying here”. When Jill stepped foot to the gate of the halloween festival a monster that was watching them the whole time jumped out and blocked the gate. The monster said “where do you think your going? he he he…” As the monster leaped towards Jack and Jill “Run!” yelled Jill. Jack and Jill ran inside the trick festival, “I found a sword to defeat the monster” said Jack. Jill was hiding behind Jack because Jill was scared and didn’t want to be food for the monster. Jack and Jill slowly crept out of the trick festival. Jack said to Jill “stand beside me i got a extra pair of a sword” Jack and Jill went out and fought the monster together, the monster was almost down and it was also tired.

Chapter 4: The End

Jack threw the sword at the monster’s eye and the monster was down. The monster spreaded to pieces of shards. Jack said to Jill “You have fought well little sister” Jill said once more “Can we go home please?” Jack replied “No” “What!” said Jill “Just kidding ha ha ha! Let's go home” and off they went back home sleeping tight in their bed.